Activity 3.3
Choose the best essay plan for this task:
The charts below show the number of workplace injuries, per year, at a factory and the
actions that were taken to reduce injuries, between 1985 and 1995.
Plan 1
Answer
Plan 1. Not good. It doesn't make a clear connection between the actions and their effect on
the number of injuries.
Part 2
Answer
Plan 2. Not good. The second paragraph is too long and contains too many different ideas.
Remember, to get a good mark, each paragraph must have one 'main' idea.
Plan 3
Answer
Plan 3. Good. The information focuses on cause and effect. Paragraph 2 describes the
problem and the first attempt to fix the problem, which didn't work. Paragraph 3 discusses
the only action that reduced the number of injuries. Paragraph 4 discusses the final action,
which had a bad effect.
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