Practice activity 7.3: Supporting and developing ideas
Once you've brainstormed some relevant ideas, you need to think about how you can develop
and support those ideas. Here's an example paragraph that a candidate has written in answer
to the question. What's wrong with it?
It is clear that hand-held devices like phones and MP3 players are making people ruder.
No one nowadays could deny that this is the case. Because of this kind of device, people act
towards each other in a way that is much less polite. They have forgotten to use courteous
behaviour. Without a doubt, such rudeness is a direct result of technology.
The candidate has not developed or supported their ideas! They have simply repeated
the same idea over and over again in different words: that personal devices are making
people ruder. But how are they making people ruder? What is an example?
Can you write your own answer to this question? You may use some of the relevant ideas
from practice activity 7.2, as well as any other ideas or examples you can think of.
Answer
Portable electronic devices have brought a level of convenience to our lives that was
unimaginable just a few short decades ago, enabling us to stay in touch and be entertained
wherever we are. Like almost all technological advances, however, there are some negative
effects. One such effect is that these personal devices are making people ruder both to
people they know and to strangers.
It is a common sight to see two people at a café or restaurant together but not talking,
because they are busy playing with their iPad or iPhone. It is also common to be having
a conversation with someone and have them suddenly ignore you to read a text. Even in
situations where it has traditionally been considered especially important to respect
other people and be polite, such as a classroom or business meeting, people cannot tear
themselves away from their devices. All of these examples make clear how this technology
is interfering with accepted social behaviour.
As well as being rude to the people they are with, people are often rude to others in
their general environment as a result of their addiction to technology. Perhaps the best
example of this is people who answer their phone in cinemas, ruining the experience of an
entire audience. But there are also the people who conduct Loud personal conversations in
public places or, on the other side of the spectrum, bus-takers who perpetually have their
earphones in and use this as an excuse to ignore another passenger's question or request
for help.
There will always be rude people in the world, regardless of how society and technology
may change. However, we need to do our best to see that the lure of personal entertainment
does not take away our basic respect and concern for others.
(300 words)
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